Flirting with a Potencial Disaster

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Teen Poetry #8

Flirting with a Potencial Disaster

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

0 posted 2007-06-17 03:25 PM

And you make it seem as though you think
You think my past is small and insignificant to me
Disregard my feelings- the things I won’t say- maybe it’s not wise
And yet your own sorrow spills from your eyes

And everything hurts and you are my best friend
Don’t love me again and ruin what we have right now
But sometimes I need to feel loved and it would be so easy to . . .
So easy to let you hold me, so easy to cry on you

And it hurts my heart a little so see you like another
But I know it’s for the best but I suspect
I think you cover up your feelings for me with her
And it’s got me confused and I don’t care

So what do you feel when you touch my porcelain skin?
The curves of my waist fit so well in your hands
And my fingers remember yours so well and your touch
But let’s not get carried away with these things that could destroy us

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

[This message has been edited by RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed (06-17-2007 08:48 PM).]

Alaina
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since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

1 posted 2007-06-17 03:52 PM

that's great very nice job i really like "I think you cover up your feelings for me with her" i think everyone can relate to that

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

2 posted 2007-06-18 11:33 PM

i loved every bit of it there was passion and wonder and i definitely have felt this before where you are pretty sure they cover up their feelings by having another person

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2007-06-19 07:32 AM

Very good. The best I have read of your so far. this was really well written but I think the last line should be a bit shorter because the destroying us is a bit long to read, maybe end or something less awkyard to read.
i can soo relate, . THe title is a mouthful though, but other than that this poem is fabolous. It really really is

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2007-06-19 05:48 PM

Wow I really love this it was really great. Can relate to this.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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