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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

0 posted 2007-06-12 04:52 PM

Morning in Peace(s)

It’s funny to me, that I can have peace right now
When I should be hurting and crying my heart out
But yet it seems my day is brighter than the last one
And I can smile with out it being a lie- I have won

My numbness comes and goes, like the blinking highway lights
Faith keeps me strong; love from friends grows to soaring heights
I feel so strange, not quiet dead, not quiet unfeeling, not quiet real
Well, I suppose I’ll figure it all out- I only have time to kill

Mornings never come with out a sun rise in the distance
You just can’t always see the rays that warm the resistance
A resistance that I put into practice, one that doesn’t fade
So listen to my words- sharper than an executioner’s blade

Let me face haunt you to the very end of your sure to be long days
See my happy and crying eyes until you remove every trace
For I just don’t see your face in my memory reserves anymore
It’s gone, but your words that became lies still linger, I don’t know what for

So then that’s it, well goodbye I guess you’re gone and gone for ever
To bad, I thought you could weather all types of windy cold weather
Wasn’t it you who loved the bitter cold that I so detested?
I hope that all of your life goes from this experience unrested

I stuck my bare hand into your rip cage and fished around until I found your heart ripped it out tore it apart while saying You dont need this anymore

[This message has been edited by RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed (06-12-2007 06:03 PM).]

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

1 posted 2007-06-12 11:14 PM

this was a fairly well written not my favourite one of yours but still good however i think there as a few spelling or grammatical errors closer to the end i think it was only one line just the way it read didn't make sense so i think a letter or something might have been left out but keep up the good work

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-06-13 12:40 PM

thanks, acually these types of poems are unusual for me, i just seem to have brang most of them here. funny huh. most of my stuff is what you are suggesting that i do with these.

thanks for the writes and comments. i appreicate your insight and "fixers" lol

-Red

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