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Teen Poetry #8

Unseeing Eyes

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

0 posted 2007-06-10 11:32 PM

I watch with unseeing eyes
What did I miss now
Because of my fadded blue eyes
I watch my life
From the eyes of another face

I watch with unseeing eyes
As the world passes by
That sad look upon his face
Goes unnoticed
To hers or is it mine
I do not know
But it is blessed

I watch with these unseeing eyes
My body is the only thing that ties
Ties me to this place
It leaves such a bad taste
That I close my eyes to the wretchedness
And I walk with unseeing eyes

MegMeg
Member

since 2007-05-14

Posts 85
Virginia

1 posted 2007-06-11 09:00 AM

Deep, I love the style...Not to sound like a grammar freak or whatever, but the word faded only has ons one "d" in the middle. other than that your poem was lovely.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2007-06-11 02:28 PM

A very nice write

i really like your style.

Life is not a matter of destiny, but a matter of choice.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2007-06-11 07:50 PM

don't we all wander with "unseeing eyes" as you so very poetically put it (loved that by the way). thanks for making it all a bit clearer, and don't worry i can't spell for crap either, half the time i spell spell "speel" typo error- but still lol.

-Red

I stuck my bare hand into your rip cage and fished around until I found your heart ripped it out tore it apart while saying You dont need this anymore

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