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forever*wishing Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 178where my heart is 
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Winning? Winning doesn’t always mean beating some one You think your on top when you have the gun But inside you know you’re going the coward’s way By pushing the enemy down, and running this day I turn the corner in the dead of night There’s a hidden pass to my right side I hit the ground: now a man stands above me A streetlight behind him shone, I could see. Answers to your problems can’t just appear Hurting innocence won’t wipe away those tears Being the standing when the fight is over Does not mean you’ve hidden who you were Now inside the alley the stranger jumped out of He looked at me and gave me a shove Blow after blow, my mouth fills with blood I collapse to the ground; my face in the mud Are you lost in the darkest corners of the world? Reach out your hand for help not to grab and hurl Look into the eyes of those you desire to hurt Do you really want to take this any further? A kick in the stomach; silent screams in my ears I look to the sky my eyes filled with tears Stars fade in and out along with sounding sirens The man runs away from his newly made burdens Look up gaze into the distance See your whole life in a single instant The past shouldn’t change who you are But keep it in mind to learn for the future What before was pain is now fading into white As it has been described, I see a light But just as soon, I open my eyes Back into the world, I’ve been given life Winning is about bringing the best Out of situations created by mess Slow to anger wins all fights Not just strength, violence, or might This is the sure way to always win To never lift a fist in anger again For the man who does Is the man who runs And the man who makes peace Recovers faster you see For he has only physical wounds While the other cannot heal so soon With an injured soul at hand He must wander dried lands Searching for something that cannot be found Anywhere else but in the hands of God. ((i wrote this a while ago and...i hope its understandible... )) |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I really like this, I definitly agree with this, and the way you put it. It is so true that not fighting wins way more than someone who starts fights or is in them. I totally agree and this is so true to what I believe in , so I really like this. |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
don't get me wrong this is a good poem but to me the way that you wrote it seems disconnected i don't know if that is how it is suppose to be but thats how i felt when rading it |
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