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RIP Grandpa
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RIP Grandpa |
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Reba Burt New Member
since 2007-05-31
Posts 9Indiana |
This is a poem i wrote for my grandpa, whom i love dearly and will see again someday October 27th 2006 you passed away, on october 27th 2006, i still cry about it at night, i am filled with regret that i didnt spend more time with you i was away while you were dieing i was in the hospital, crying luckily i saw you, the day befor you went, i will not say good-bye forever, i will just say, fare-well for now, you passed away on october 27th 2006 |
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Reba Burt New Member
since 2007-05-31
Posts 9Indiana |
plz tell me what u think of this poem, it is my 1st post |
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Reba Burt New Member
since 2007-05-31
Posts 9Indiana |
i really love this poem that i wrote. please tell me what you think of it |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
It was good, and short but I think you should write more, if it doesn't hurt too much as grief can, try to describe your grandfather to us and why you love him. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I'm sorry for your loss. Welcome to Passions I think the poem is good, filled with emotion, the poems like that are always deeper. Although I do agree with Rhia try writing more if you can. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
welcome and i liked the poem i too like the others would like a little more writing if you can but if it hurts to much this was good for a first poem i hope to see some more writing from you soon and i am sorry for your loss |
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