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Teen Poetry #8

Be proud. I dare you

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

0 posted 2007-05-15 05:13 PM

http://studentweb.tulane.edu/~mmcclosk/guatabuse.html

These children are on the streets
because america crushed their dreams.
we funded the civil war
and caused their scars.

Our blood money let the guerrilla fighters kill.
The fathers and mothers and sisters now nil
the children they knew are without a home ,
so they turn to the street, and suffer alone.

This abuse is not committed by the criminals but by the police.
These children are more so the victims than anyone I see.
Because our country we love and are so happy to represent
chose to create this monster,they die, and no words are said.

If this means anything to you
say something , this is true
speak up and use your words.
It is time for them to be heard

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

1 posted 2007-05-16 10:01 PM

it is a nice poem and it is very sad to know that this happens in the world that there is truth to your poem that hits hard knowing that it is caused partially from the civil war all i can say is it is sad very very sad people are like this

unholyjudgement
Member

since 2007-02-27

Posts 116
Wherever my soul takes me next

2 posted 2007-05-17 09:00 AM

I thought the message within was too true. However it dident seem to flow right and the poem itself was rendered weak.
None the less, good job

My mind is like lightning
One brilliant flash and its gone

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