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Come one, come all (and please excuse the pun)
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Come one, come all (and please excuse the pun) |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248
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Promiscuity at its greatest Good evening, ladies and gentlemen, Tonight we have spectacular event for you A crossroads of ignorance! Where two fragile minds intercept and the aging innocence is lost beneath the sheets. Come one, come all (and please excuse the pun) but when ignorance is bliss and sexuality is comforting Who is to say they can't do otherwise? Spectacular, Spectacular, Please take your seats, for we're ready to begin, and don't forget to visit our snack bar! These two kids have no idea what they're getting into. A car crash of desires, a chessboard without tactics, a myriad of elements spontaneously combusting. Spectacular. Dare you dream of the possibilities? You were never ready for this. I was never ready for this. Come one, come all (and please excuse the pun) Get ready to witness the loss of happiness, as our stars perform without a net! |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
interesting form of expression....though i liked it alot. |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
So interesting wasn't a compliment? haha. Anything specific? |
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Shake Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 40 |
It was unusual,but I liked it,good style. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Very interesting and unique way of describing this. It worked well, nice write. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I enjoyed your perspective of unprotected sex, and what a great message you send out to warn young people - good for you! Very nicely done, but poetically and informatively. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I read this a while back and I never found time to comment. i'm hoping that this will bump this poem back up to the top because those who haven't read it should. It's a wonderful display. I read the whole thing and then I read just the normal print and then just the italicized words. It's amazing how you did this how you fit it together. I truly love it. The concept of unprotected sex is brought up well here and it seems to be talking of teenagers. not being ready. This was really good. |
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