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Teen Poetry #8

Sedated

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-04-12 05:44 PM

will you please keep me sedated,
I dont want see what ive become.
I feel like im sinking,
Im at a loss for what ive done.

Im falling away,
With only one escape.

So ill just throw my head back,
as i raise the bottle up.
Ive downed three pints of jack today,
and ive still not had enough.

Even when im drunk as hell,
Im bleeding through the seems,
of a poorly made costume;
that was once the real me.

So ill keep myself sedated,
I dont want to see what ive become.
I feel like im sinking,
And im at a loss for what ive done.

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2007-04-12 05:48 PM

"Even when im drunk as hell,
I'm bleeding through the seems,
of a poorly made costume;
that was once the real me."

My personal favorite line. I love it, great flow, very dark and twisty. Excellent write!

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

2 posted 2007-04-12 06:35 PM

thanks

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-04-14 01:19 AM

this is the best poem ever I love it...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

4 posted 2007-04-14 01:54 AM

This is great.. Another huge poem from the American Mr Beauty!!

playing.with.crayons
Member

since 2006-01-02

Posts 362
Neverland

5 posted 2007-04-16 08:22 AM

pretty rad username, by the way.

more importantly, I *enjoyed* your write, if thats the right word.
lovely poem.
~ cheye

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