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Teen Poetry #8

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turrhall
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since 2007-04-11

Posts 1

0 posted 2007-04-11 10:21 AM

I hover sadly through past noon,
confined to an empty room,
as my father shuffles past,
completing his menial task

What is the meaning of my worldly worth,
if I cannot enjoy this sunny Earth?
As I sit and watch life go by,
I realise, soon, I will cease to be

So what have I done so far?
Learnt to walk, learnt to swim,
how will this last in the memory of those who as yet do not twinkle in their fathers' eye?

But yet, when I relax and play, my thoughts drift to things less 'real',
my life is wasted on my crotch.

starpower
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 82
Utah

1 posted 2007-04-11 11:42 PM

Hello,
Good words to the poem and keep up the good work.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2007-04-12 12:10 PM

I hover sadly through past noon,
confined to an empty room~
Liked this part. after the 2nd stanza though it seemed to lose the structure... Great 1st post though. Welcome to Passions.
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

starpower
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 82
Utah

3 posted 2007-04-12 06:17 PM

i am new also

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