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Loving You |
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Amaya Junior Member
since 2007-01-23
Posts 10Mississippi |
I'm can't say, How I started to fill this way Everday, I fill like I"m going insane. Everytime I see you, I never know what to do. I used to want to die, But now I'm just glad to be alive. Knowing that you'll always be in my life. This feeling inside, I cannot hide. No matter how hard I try. I'm Loving You You are Loving Me I'll never be scared, Knowing that you are forever near. Always holding me so dear. I once was ripped apart But you fixed my aching heart Hopefully it will stay together Making our love last forever. (Its not all together.But I think it is nice.I gave this to my ex before we broke up.) Let me know when I'm finally apart of this group |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
[you were part of our group from the start hun!!  but ill be the one to let you know..lol]I liked it..the flow was definetely off in some places, but that didn't ruin the poem. It was nice. . .You might try [if you want to] editing it to make it flow better, if you'd want to re-do the poem. You could make it longer and more detailed if you did that!!it's good the way it is, i was only suggesting that if you ever can't think of what to write, to re-write your old poems![its what i do..haha] anyway, sorry about your ex, i know that's hard..  ~missy |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
The flow was really strong . And the feeling was even better. i really liked this... hunnie ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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