Teen Poetry #8 |
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my weakness |
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um_idk Junior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 32minnesota |
you look in my eyes and no when i tell lies you see the blood my eyes begin to flood like this you souldnt see me so just listen and let me be i tryed so hard to fight but the grip was so tight i thought i was invinsable i thought i was untouchable they let me choose to leave or lose they fond my weakness and they use this they no the people i be close to so i leave for all of you yea if that makes sense kinda mad but be honest |
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forever*wishing Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 178where my heart is |
well, the only thing i noticed was 'know' was spelled 'no' twice, but i guess that could just be a style of writing...? other than that, i liked it =) |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I reall think that having spelling errors that are minor but so easy to notice take away from the writing and this poem was good, so even the minor things, well it made me kinda concentrate on them instead. good poem though and the words inside the poem... hunnie ![]() ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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