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Teen Poetry #8

in the closet

um_idk
Junior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 32
minnesota

0 posted 2007-01-22 11:01 PM

you say everythin will be alright
so in my room i sit thight
then the screamin starts
but i can only catch parts
with them screamin and cryin
talkin to them they no i be lyin
so in the closet is were we sit
sittin and listenin for a bit
listen for i hit to land
with my knife at hand

1/22/07

i dont no i dont really like it

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2007-01-23 07:49 AM

I like it.. it has lots of potential.. if you like i could take it and tweak with it to make it make more sense.. (if that makes sense)

um_idk
Junior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 32
minnesota

2 posted 2007-01-23 04:29 PM

yea that makes sence and yea id like for you to if you want

[This message has been edited by um_idk (01-24-2007 03:43 AM).]

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2007-01-24 11:01 AM

Anchio , posso?

Can I too.

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