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Awww Mum |
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Fairplay Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 222England |
Life as a teen can be quite obscene Sponging off old mum and dad It wasn’t the same I knew the game Even when I was a lad Life in the “Old Days” when everyone pays Or else it’s a clip round the lug The whole world I’d seen When I was a teen See I wasn’t a mug Nothing is free for you or for me So might as well make your own fun Don’t sit and groan Be left on your own With nowhere to run |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Welcome to Passions i hope you like it here... I liked this but my favorite was the last Stanza, i feel that was the strong point... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Life as a Teen can be quite obscene depending which school you attended I know just like you, I found it was true that the least said would then soonest mend. But I was quite quiet, while you was a riot, an angel, not devil like you. The same has applied to the rest of my ride, like brothers in all that we do. So welcome to pip, I've been here bit, near to a week I should think. The natives I fear all quickly appear when finding your words on their link. But do not despair, for some seem to care and will actually critique your rhyme. From what I have seen, even the 'obscene' may get a small comment with time. With a 'clip round the lug' or a smiley great hug the folk here seem friendly enough. And some even rhyme so given some time They may all join our wonderful bug! The moment created this second, is a moment that's going to last. |
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