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*Swing_Life_Away* Junior Member
since 2006-12-22
Posts 10UK |
I saw you looking at your feet I knew it was the last straw These weeks I’d watched you as you sleep and knocking at your door To make sure you were coping But not any more Your face was blunt, your hands clasped No smile escaped you lips Wondered where my friend had gone Swallowed by depression You needed me I was there, standing by your side My shoulder forever yours You never laughed nor joined in While we were playing immature While dancing I would look back And see you crying ever more That boy you met's not worth it Just show him the door I want you back again Now this is going too far And I’m crying while I’m writing this She’ll shut herself in her room And think about what she missed What she should have said and done? Too much too much too much Why doesn’t she tell me anymore? Why won’t she come to me to confide What have I said, what have I done? Where is she now? Were has she gone? I love you, and always will do, never forget that. |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
i don't believe i've seen you before so let me be the first on to welcome you to PIP. amazing. i liked this stanzas "Why doesn’t she tell me anymore? Why won’t she come to me to confide What have I said, what have I done? Where is she now? Were has she gone? I love you, and always will do, never forget that." it's very sweet, don't pressure and maybe let her come to you. unless she looks. then you can go to her. "Love is when you tell a guy you like his shirt, then he wears it |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i liked that i can relate to this (well your friends side of view) maybe she needs to get help cuz if she is depressed it can be very serious, but don't feel bad she will come to you when she can. depression is very hard to handle b/c you feel like you don't really fit in and noone cares. don't push her but maybe try to make her feel like you love her, i know you do, but maybe she doesn't feel like anyone does. that is how i felt, but after it all came back and i knew no one hated me, they were all just scared of the way i was acting. don't be scared open up to her and she'll open up to you. WELCOME TO PASSIONS... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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