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WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

0 posted 2006-12-13 09:35 PM

I open my cell ten times a day,
Always disappointed when I put it away.
And I saved the only message you’ve left me,
And listen to it before I go to sleep.
I can’t believe that I’m so obsessed,
There’s barely any of my patience left.

I hate waiting for you to call,
It makes me wonder if you want to at all.
And I hate waiting for you to get online,
Especially since I wait all the time.
Are you bored with me, since we’re past “shiny and new”,
I’m so damn tired of waiting for you.

Now, I’m not saying that’s right or it’s fair,
But I’d like to know if you even still care.
And I want to believe that you still love me,
But can I look if I may not want to see?
And I’d like to believe you still what this,
But what if I’m not the one you miss?

I hate waiting for you to call,
It makes me wonder if you want to at all.
And I hate waiting for you to get online,
Especially since I wait all the time.
Are you bored with me, since we’re past “shiny and new”,
I’m so damn tired of waiting for you.

I love you so much, do you love me, too?
I’m so tired of waiting for you.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-12-18 09:13 PM

I really like this i can easily relate and i thought the flow was nice too. this is going into my library

hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-12-19 12:57 PM

Hi WaterFairy103,

Well, you've done it again! Amazed me at the talent you shown in this poem.

You have always been one of my favorite people to post on pip and I must admit you still are.

This poem was brilliant, beautiful, sad, cautious? I found that mixing the old with a little bit of new made the poem even better, aka, cell phones and internet vs old style love poems, that can get old but didn't in this.

Thanks for sharing; i'd love to read more!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

3 posted 2007-01-19 12:28 PM

ahhh a-m-a-zing!!!!!!

i can relate SO MUCH!!!! I defiantly had some text messages from last year that ive kept on my phone from..someone=] I'm sorry you had to go through this heartbreak too! Anyway, i actually wrote a poem like this at one point last summer..but it was about the text messages...Kind of ironic!

I really enjoyed this waterfairy! You really did a superb job! WELL DONE! plus the rhyme wasn't at all forced and it just flowed SO well!
love love love it!

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

4 posted 2007-01-20 12:45 PM

I’m so damn tired of waiting for you.

My fav line.. i could feel the emotion behind it. Very nice write. Full of emotion and talent.

Again WOW

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