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You Don't Have to Tell Me
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You Don't Have to Tell Me |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
I noticed you're a little quiet tonight And I wanna ask you if you're all right But it's dumb question I already know you're not And you told everyone That you don't want to talk… If you want, I'll leave alone, But I just want you to know You don't have to tell me what's wrong I don't have to know what's going on I'll just lay here in your arms you don't have to say a thing We'll just stay here with each other until you're okay… So we can fall asleep together I know tomorrow will be better 'cause I have you and you have me Our good luck is coming just wait and see But that's for the rest of our lives My heart, just for tonight… You don't have to tell me what's wrong, And I don't have to know what's going on I'll just lay here in your arms you don't have to say a thing We'll just stay here with each other until you're okay… I want you to know you're my whole world You don't have to prove anything to this girl… You don't have to tell me what's wrong And I don't have to know what's going on I'll just lay here in your arms you don't have to say a thing We'll just stay here with each other until you're okay… We'll just stay here with each other Until you're okay. ~I love you, Peter!! Don't take life so seriously. It's not permanent. |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
Ooookay. Sooo just a little explanation about the formatting choices here (I feel so professional saying that...). You'll first notice that the only real period, rather than the dot dot dot, is at the very end. Whiiiich is deliberate. It's supposed to be an outpouring of emotion, a girl telling her boyfriend that she loves him and he doesn't have to tell her why he's upset, because she's just there for him. It's one long, continuous sentence, basically. The letters on the new lines ARE capitalized where there is an implied new sentence, tho, if that boggles your mind a little. The other thing that I wanted to point out that I technically already DID point out is the dot dot dot at the end of the repeated stanza. That just sort of felt right to me when I was writing it... It's sort of like an open-ended question, like when are you going to be okay again? Is there any way I can help you be okay again? Soo... Yeeeah... Hope you enjoy it! Don't take life so seriously. It's not permanent. |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
I for one love it! And I did notice the period thing and I love that too! I love the repetitiveness of that one stanza it really added to it and it wasn't too much I dont think. Great write. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
WaterFairy.... I LOVED IT!... ATM i'm in a situation where everybody's telling me to leave this guy because he's with somebody else (aka, he left me, he's fiance, for his ex gf, because he feels responsible for her so called "mental ilness" the one she is faking.. Him and her were until last night, living in MY HOUSE the one my fiance and i shared together.) Anyhow cut an insainly long story short everybody is telling me to get over him, they know i'm insainly upset and depressed about it, who wouldn't their all saying are you okay etc (When i don't wanna hear it, i don't wanna talk about it. Yeah he's the love of my life, yeah i'm having his baby but bloody hell don't tell me things will be okay.. because it doesn't help) anyhow.... this poem i WISH was written for me, but i'm going to interpret it as if it was. Your such an amazing poet and your boy is extremly lucky to have you.. Hearts n Hugs, Jess xx |
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TrueDesire12 Junior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 11England |
Wow i like this poem! Its shows that your understanding. Most people when you dont want to say wont stop going about it antill you do, and it just makes it worse! lovely poem TrueDesire xx |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
Thanks guys!! It's been a while since I wrote something when I was upset, and I'm glad everyone likes it! = ] I hope it helps people see that even if you don't know what's wrong, there's still something wrong and if you just let that person tell you when they're ready, or not tell you at all, it will help them SO much more than if you bug them about it. = ] Anyway, thanks everybody! <3 Don't take life so seriously. It's not permanent. |
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