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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
Life sucks Wanna bet? Yours may not but mine does Why? Because I'm crammed in a place With no space That's all I want Is that to much to ask? If it is I don't care I feel like everyone stares At who? Guess My life's a gigantic mess I just want space But they're all in my face What should i do? Why am I asking you? You don't listen Because you don't care What,now you're gonna stare Suprise, suprise I'm all by myself And you won't even help You know what? That's just like you You're never there, You don't care So you know what? Back off Get outta my face 'Cause I need my space |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
lolz, I liked the attitude in this poem a lot! A kind of "help me or get out of my way" sort of feel to it. Standing up for your rights kind of poem, in a way... It was an enjoyable read for me. The poem is something I can relate to in many ways. Thanks for sharing!  PS- Pen&Paper = pencil&paper? "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
u kno who i am u know who i be Knock, knock knock, Guess what? It's ME!!! see ya later candles! i'm gonna start callin u that |
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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
thanks for the reviews peoples stargal that's exactly what i was going for i just couldn't think of the right words (you know what i mean?)  |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I agree with what Stargirl has said. I loved the "attitude" on this poem. Excellent job. ~Alli~ |
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Shaddow1 Junior Member
since 2006-09-04
Posts 41Kingman Az, USA |
Lol guess I am joining the crown I love the additude as well. I just have one quetion. Who are you aiming the poem at? If it were me I would have to say that parentals. lol I like it none the less. Kudos Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller |
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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
yeah this poem was kinda aimed at one or both of my parents....ssshhhhh! don't tell them though oh and thanks for the reviews you guys are so nice |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow that was nice...attitude luved it haha... pen&paper and pencil&paper are they the same pple or different? mmkay... hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
yeah i wanna know also, pen and paper and pencil and paper have kinda diff styles of writing though so i dunno. good poem, i like the additude also. good write |
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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
i think i said this in my other poem(not sure)but pen&paper and i are different ppl but she is one of my best friends so i made my pen name pencil&paper so we would kinda be connected |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
ohhhhhhhhh i see okay yea you both do have diff. styles so cool haha and again i liked this poem:P ...hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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