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shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

0 posted 2008-11-06 11:27 PM

If I died tomorrow,
Would you actually grieve and cry?
Would you think about the words you never said
As you watched me laugh and die?

If I died tomorrow,
Would you honestly even care?
Would you think of how we used to be
And how it didn’t seem too fair?

If I died tomorrow,
Would you think of me at night?
Would you ponder on my ashen face
And wish me there tonight?

If I died tomorrow,
Would you cry out all your tears?
Would you wonder why my pasted smile
seemed to all hide all of my fears?

If I died tomorrow,
Would you think about me one more night?
Would you realize that through everything that happened,
I never really was alright?

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2008-11-07 01:25 AM

Tori..
Love the poem, Love it's context.. Love you!

But remeber this cause it comes straight from my heart

"If you died tommorrow"
"I'd cry out in song"
"the world lost an angel"
" because God got it wrong!"

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-11-07 12:56 PM

Tori amazing poem. And of course We'd all miss you. You give me the joy out of my life that I seem to ignore. Thanks for being there.

"If we lost you tonight.
Tears would never cease
A part of me would die
This pain would never decrease.

Saying I didn't miss you.
Would be an utter lie.
I wouldn't be able to live with myself
Because I wouldn't be able to get over your death

I'd find a way to heal
After the pain I was put through
But I'd learn to smile again
When ever I think of you.."

Love ya bunches Tori!!

-Zach

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

aimebaby
New Member

since 2008-11-01

Posts 9

3 posted 2008-11-07 07:48 PM

loved it!
a great use of rhetorical questions.
great structure.

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

4 posted 2008-11-08 01:43 AM

Now yous got my brain going which isn't so great when it's 12:40 in the morning. Sweetie, if you died tomorrow I'd be right behind you. Beautiful poem; brings tears.

luv you,

{~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans....#}
{~Emily~}

poshjenner99
New Member

since 2008-11-05

Posts 2

5 posted 2008-11-12 11:28 AM

hi

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