Teen Poetry #8 |
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Clarity Shines Through |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN ![]() |
here i am lost inside my head where minutes dont exist and nothings ever said but with silence never broken clarity shines through an epiphany of broken dreams are drowned out with the thought of you so step back as it all goes black and let it lull you off to sleep choke it out as it comes around then stop and try to breath |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Wow. Good stuff. Liked the last stanza especially. Alarming. But in a good way. Makes you stop and think. |
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Falling rain![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
I like the first stanza. I understood it more then your second one.. but maybe I'll have to re-read your poem again.. Its a good poem.. not my favorite tho. -Zach "I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!" |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Wow, good poem!!! "Life is too confusing, but I like it that way!" |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
i really liked this one, it was short but to the point and i agree with octave, it makes you stop and think. good work ![]() |
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