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0 posted 2008-08-29 09:11 AM


A little problem once occured,
Where I was stuck in hell.
I said some things I actually meant,
And was forgiven by one...
But hated by all.

It doesn't stop,
All the harassing and cursing,
Death glares and troubled actions.
All because I was forgiven by one...
And still hated by all.


So this isn't my best work at all. I was just feeling like posting something so tell me if it's good or not and if I should add more.

~*Julianna*~

"You don't know me...but I know you. That's all that matters right now... Mr.Rainey!" - Secret Window

© Copyright 2008 Julianna - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-08-29 03:57 PM


First nice poem.. second I think it would be fine as it is.. but I would like to read more...

"Only in darkness can we see the stars.
And only there is it darkest before the dawn."

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