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Teen Poetry #8

It Is You Who...

DeSi - BG
Junior Member

since 2008-08-12

Posts 18
BULGARIA

0 posted 2008-08-12 06:51 AM

It is you…

It is you, who makes me wanna smille
Who makes me wanna laugh…
It is you, holding my hends while
I am just about to fall…

It is you, who keeps my soul
Who keeps the whole of me above…
It is you who makes me wanna go
Finding what is like to love…

It is you,who makes me stand up
Who makes me wanna rise…
It is you, only you….
That keeps me alive all the time…

It is you, who makes me want to
Want to go on, without slowing down…
It is you who gives me strenght to
Get my feet off the ground…

It is you that makes me wanna fly
Who gives me wings…
It is you who makes me wanna touch the sky
Inspie of everithing…

BeyaK
Member

since 2008-08-07

Posts 126
Philippines

1 posted 2008-08-12 12:54 PM

nice... really in love. keep posting. i enjoyed reading this

~~*Kaye B.*~~

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

2 posted 2008-08-12 09:17 PM

this is a really interesting piece. the wording was simple but very understandable. great job. waiting to see more

~*Julianna*~

"You don't know me...but I know you. That's all that matters right now... Mr.Rainey!" - Secret Window

Love_Skull
Junior Member

since 2008-07-15

Posts 44

3 posted 2008-08-12 11:08 PM

great write! keep posting...

~Leah

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

4 posted 2008-08-13 01:31 AM

I've gotta agree with JAFS (sorry for the shortening!) your poem was very simple, but it's simplistic flow worked very well.

Welcome to Passions, and hope to see more!
-Andrew

There is power in the pen.

DeSi - BG
Junior Member

since 2008-08-12

Posts 18
BULGARIA

5 posted 2008-08-13 03:54 AM

Thanks to everione for the great replies (hug)

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

6 posted 2008-08-13 11:08 AM

Welcome to Passions. hope to read more soon. this poem was great.. i love it!
Krysti

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