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Kahlan
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since 2008-06-08

Posts 8
Bakersfield

0 posted 2008-08-09 07:30 PM

~Needs a name~

    We were once inseparable,
    Part of one being – people would say.
    The most unpredictable thing could never change our relationship,
    Well…. we thought, until forever ended.

    As I matured,
    My curiosity grew.
    Womanhood was taking over my childish vantage point.
    What I wanted…. not even I knew.

    You noticed me less;
    I watched you more,
    I was caught in the act one morning,
    You smiled back.
    Connection… I thought.

    She came without warning,
    Crystal-blue eyes with fiery red hair, features of a goddess
    She had a smile that would melt a heart of steel.
    Destiny was a heartbreak that was waiting to happen.

    Behind me, she smiled.
    It only then hit me,
    She had melted a heart that was once, I thought, was true to only me.
    I could see not an ounce of anger or hate in his eyes once they met those of the "angel".

    My heart ached,
    My dreams shattered.
    I had been tricked by love.
    As much as I cried, I never once felt the same.

    Four years had passed,
    I hear a phone ring.
    The whole world could've called at that moment.
    ....It was you.

    The bond of our relationship had been stabbed.
    Yet, I felt it four years ealier.
    You had no clue.
    But I guess I derserved it.

   Like a wise one said, "to feel the dagger brfore it has struck is the most unbearable pain."
   Like a nightmare.....at that moment, Forever ended....

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-08-11 03:36 AM

Like a nightmare.....at that moment, Forever ended....

great poem loved this
Krysti

lilshortcake
Junior Member

since 2008-08-11

Posts 10
No Comment

2 posted 2008-08-11 08:02 PM

That was really deep and I still managed to understand. You have a good way of writing. Keep it up.

from-the newbe Tammy

Talent is like food! You shouldn't waste it.

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

3 posted 2008-08-12 01:58 AM

Hi! Allow me to offer my belated welcome to Piptalk! (LOL)

Anyway, I really liked your poem. It flowed differently than most of the poems I've seen here. This piece had a lot of sharp contrasts, and filled my head with lots of images.

Hope to see more!
-Andrew

There is power in the pen.

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