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Elias Nevermore
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0 posted 2008-07-23 12:01 PM



Broken down by a shot
heard across the room,
Man shatters as he
hits the final barrier.

Crimson flood emerges out
of the breathless crater.
Glass shards scattered
in the endless chaos.


"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
1 posted 2008-07-26 11:26 PM


Dude, I gotta be honest. Your poem put these vivid images in my eyes, but I have no idea what I'm seeing...
Strong imagery and words that can't compute any farther.

There is power in the pen.

Elias Nevermore
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since 2007-11-03
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2 posted 2008-07-26 11:28 PM


Well the poem is supposed to be an abstract perspective on the ruthlessness of murder, and how humanity has digressed into such great savagery that it has become such commonplace.
Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
3 posted 2008-07-29 11:24 PM


Ohhhh! I think I understand a little better! ^^ Thanks!

There is power in the pen.

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