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Symbol of a text message |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I don't know if this is teen or not. This needs serious help though. Suggestions? ()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()() Bold ink spots formed to make intricate shapes standing out on the flatness of a metal shell. Jumbled words mixed with a bucket of feelings let symbols carrying false clarity line the screen. A stretched thin line hops from emblem to emblem. Disappearing in an instant. Reappearing beside one conveyed tone. Boring monosyllable sectors before the message. Pre-crafting the images that erupt into mind. Molding wavelengths of thought to one creation. Concluding an idea to its finality. Birthing hopes and pointless wishes, kindling to flame. Closing a completed chapter to stain in ink a new page. Text messaged into play, tiny little figures with imprinted smiles jump out at wrinkled eyes. Trying to put emphasis on written words. Just make it harder to truly realize the outline of the plan. Almost emotionless, A text message. [This message has been edited by rhia_5779 (10-22-2006 07:41 AM).] |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Birthing hopes and pointless wishes, kindling to flame. Closing a completed chapter to stain in ink a new page. my favorite part. I liked this, idk but it almost seemed too caught up in describing it that it left little emotion. It's a neat concept though, a good reminder that poetry can come from just about anything  AIM-beatufu1tragidy |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
wasnt sopposed to have alot of emotion |
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