never could think of a title for this

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imsimplyme
Junior Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 16
California

0 posted 2008-04-15 09:16 PM

I've never been good at coming up with titles so if you have any suggestions feel free

Have you ever lost that special someone
and woundered of they still thought of you?
This is something I wonder everyday.
Why can't I think of somwthing to say?
Whenever she comes to mind,
I pray we're ment to be.
Why can't I ask her if she still loves me?

I wish I could tell her what is on my mind,
but when I think of what she could say
my mind goes blank and I wait for another day.
The fear of her not loving me brings pain, I dont think I could take.

But it's time to face my fear,
I still love everything about you
as I have from the start
my feelings havent changed
cuz you still hold that special place in my heart.

Do I dare reach out a take your hand
or will I have to relize,
I will forever have tears in my eyes.
Telling you this could bring undescibable pain
but when i think of whats to gain, my feelings become easy to explain.

I let my whole world slip away
so here's the last thing i will say.
There is no one in the world,
that holds my heart like you
and I hope someday,
you will relize this is true

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2008-04-15 09:25 PM

awe, sweet poem. Welcome to PIP.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-04-15 10:23 PM

Very nice post! this has plenty of emotion in it! *right now im giving a standing novation*

And welcome to PIP!!

~Zach~

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

3 posted 2008-04-16 12:28 PM

i would call it
"the one who holds my heart"
but thats just my opinion..n e ways this was great i loved it
and u should tell her cuz u never know..maybe today is your or her last day on this earth..just saying

imsimplyme
Junior Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 16
California

4 posted 2008-04-16 11:29 AM

haha thanks, thats a good title.
lol she already knows, its a weird situation

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2008-04-17 08:47 AM

Hmmm I liked the idea of the poem but I find many many spelling mistakes, so next time try first writing in word and spellcheck, also I found there wasn't much flow to the whole, but rather for only small parts. However it was still a good read

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

6 posted 2008-04-17 07:15 PM

hey, this is great i love it and i have felt this way before,,, welcome to pip hopeing to read more soon....this is a library(i dont care about the spelling)

JJ

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2008-04-18 11:52 AM

Welcome To Passions Greg.... great poem I know i can def. relate to this....not that cool of a feeling...
Krysti

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

8 posted 2008-04-22 09:11 PM

nice poem!! and welcome to PIP!!
midnightdreamer

black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show.

crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

9 posted 2008-04-23 05:33 PM

hey hey,
great write! welcome to pip

!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

PAiGEY
Junior Member

since 2008-05-01

Posts 13
victooriaa

10 posted 2008-05-02 02:11 AM

Wow.
I can totally see where your coming from.
Brilliant poem.
Would love to hear more from you.

Welcome to PIP.

x.paaaige.x

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