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Teen Poetry #8

Lifes picture.

masksrlife
Member

since 2008-03-26

Posts 109
Canada

0 posted 2008-03-30 05:31 PM

I had a picture drawn
in my head.
I had a story written
in my heart.
I had my life planned
out.

I thought I had us
figured out.
I thought I was
in love.
I thought I really
cared.

It turned out you
deserved better.
It turned out I'd
dump you any day
for him.
It turned out our
love was never real.

I have a thought and
it turned out my thought
was I was a *desaster*

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-04-04 02:33 AM

ohhhh wow i love this.. the way you started it really made me keep wanting to read on.. the ending was not really my fav. but very good begining
Krysti

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-04-04 11:55 AM

great!, but God is the one in controle, once you think you have something figured out he will change iit God has a sense of humor...

ShawtySheFly
Member

since 2007-12-19

Posts 71
In his Elevator (LOL)

3 posted 2008-04-04 04:05 PM

i agree wit both hiddensmiles and hunniegirl good job though i like it

I.>ROCK"my<Converse^cuz%i'm`RETRO*likeDAT

masksrlife
Member

since 2008-03-26

Posts 109
Canada

4 posted 2008-04-04 04:26 PM

Thankx guys and i also agree. I dont really like the ending either im trying to find some new lines that.

*-crazycece-*

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

5 posted 2008-04-06 10:21 PM

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this well written

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