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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2008-03-03 11:41 PM

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A gunshot sounded
by my ear tonight. I am left with
not so much a decaying ringing, but
a slow wave of warmth upon my eardrum.
Gently now, as the scope of my vision recedes into
a careful tunnel.
I swear
but that does nothing to slow the hypnotic
pulses moving through my nerves.
All you said was " I love you".
And all I'm shooting in return are blanks.

[This message has been edited by young_blood (03-04-2008 01:30 AM).]

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2008-03-03 11:49 PM

hmmm, very intresting, i like it.

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RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2008-03-03 11:50 PM

Ohh.. i live this.. u left me wanting more.. your very talented and i've told you so many times.. and i'm sure i'll tell u many more in the future.. love your work. its amazingly breathe takin

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2008-03-04 10:48 PM

oh thank you both!

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

4 posted 2008-03-05 07:09 PM

Yay!!! another Alex Lewis poem! I love decifering these!

OK so...another love poem Alex? Hmmm, is it a contemplation of a lost cause? No you already have the girl because she said she loved you.
However you don't feel like your affecting her in the same way? Or oh oh I know, you don't want to affect her in the same way...for whatever reason.
Your firing "blanks" while she's actualy wounding you with cupids arrow.
The tunnel is you gradualy focusing on her, and the slow wave of warmth is a description of how her "I love you" affected you.
I think. Well as you can probably tell I enjoyed this poem allot! going in my library!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2008-03-05 11:26 PM

well done earl. fantastic analysis. you have too much time on your hands my friend

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