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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-02-19 04:51 PM

this masquerade
in the setting sun
is really starting
to make me come undone
the colors bleed
through what is me
and i think that im
starting to see
what this really means

here we are as we fall apart
lost again from the start

the canvas burns
the paint runs red
the sound of your feeble voice
lost and dead

this is what we are now

turn away from the world
and thier twisted views
there useless minds
that dont revolve around you

burning broken bleeding
this is all for you

[This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (02-20-2008 06:10 AM).]

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1 posted 2008-02-19 05:36 PM

wow this is soo good!!!! omg! i know how you feel. really i do. great write!!!! can't wait to see more!

~Zach~

Earl Robertson
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2 posted 2008-02-19 06:43 PM

I am in awe! You are soo talented! This peice was absolutly amazing!!

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with you

3 posted 2008-02-19 07:31 PM

I don't know if I've ever told you but I really enjoy your poetry.

crimsonXnails
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dark/little/heavan.:*:.

4 posted 2008-02-19 08:54 PM

hey hey,
wonderful write!
!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

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Space Camp, IN

5 posted 2008-02-20 06:07 AM

thank you all very much, it means alot.

rebel~angel
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since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

6 posted 2008-02-24 11:23 PM

so i don't really have the words to describe how this made me feel...but i thought i would let you know that i found it to be absolutely amazing....

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

drowningmonky
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miami, florida

7 posted 2008-02-25 01:01 AM

wow this is really good

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8 posted 2008-02-25 03:00 AM

another strong poem Bryan.. loved this...
Krysti

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