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Teen Poetry #8

Candy Con't

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2006-10-08 01:30 AM

Here is the second part to the first poem Candy i'm not sure i like the ending to much but idk. tell me whar y'all think

I sit here thinking about what she's done,
closing my eyes on what she's become,

seeing her body at the funeral home,
what was she going through was she that alone?

hesitation marks scarred in red,
so much she never shared so much unsaid,

they have her wearing her best dress,
but no one takes notice because her bodys' a mess,

sometime i wonder what was going through her head,
that she thought she was better off dead,

I wonder if she would have stuck around,
said no to meth and stood her ground,

she wrote in blood on the wall,
here's a message to you all,

suicide is never the answer to life,
i'm just trying to end this strife.

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

1 posted 2006-10-09 12:52 PM

This sent chills down my spine. (Very well worded)

You're touching on something that's really close to home for me. I know how that girl felt...but I also know that death is not freedom, it's just the end.

I'm very greatful for you sharing this poem.

Best wishes and hope to see more.

~Kira

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