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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2008-02-03 08:07 AM

I’m done with the screaming arguments
I’m done with all your lies
I’m done with feeling your pity
I can see past your disguise

You’re just some girl with an attitude
That thinks of only herself
You pretend to be someone you not
Because you’re caught up in the life of someone else

You can really be so innocent
But deep down you make me sick
An 18 year old girl with one hell of a life
And it’s my fourteen year old brother you pick

You treat him like a puppy
That you can cuddle and adore
He is to obey your commands
And not talk to girls anymore

You think you’re so great
But you’re death warmed up
Now you’re really pregnant
And his life he must give up

I don’t who you think you are
But you’re about to meet my fist
Because this is another argument
That will end with somebody being hit

I’m done being your doormat
And you’re done messing with my brother
So I’m asking you to go away
Or you will need to run for cover

I know he’ll chose you over me
You don’t need to sling that in my face
But you are really no good for him
In fact you’re both a disgrace

So I’ll sit here crying and finally face the truth
I really don’t hate you or what you’ve done
I hate that you’ve taken my brother from me
Taken my mother and fathers only son

I watch you walk down the lane
Holding each other’s hand
To him you’re the only girl
Upon this great big land.

Tonight your really leaving
So little brother i ask of you this
It seems to be the only hope
My very last wish
Please don’t forget my face
Or even my name
Don’t forget how much i love you
Because life without youwill never be the same

Ri
Member

since 2008-02-01

Posts 67
Blackburn, England

1 posted 2008-02-03 08:24 AM

very touching, easy to read with a nice flow
Is it true, because if so that really sucks, but there's not much you can do other than repeatedly tell him of his misguided judgement

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2008-02-03 08:57 AM

This is most indeed true ri.. too bad it is.. but it is.. he says he loves her.. god knows if he does.. but atm he loves her more than he does me or my parents

Ri
Member

since 2008-02-01

Posts 67
Blackburn, England

3 posted 2008-02-03 09:09 AM

Like I said, just tel him the error of his ways, whilst reminding him that you are family,and blood is forever, although I'm sure you have already done this. Stay strong
-Ri-

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

4 posted 2008-02-03 09:19 AM

wow, that is the worst situation i have ever heard. Poor boy, i feel so bad for him. man, i turly wish that it had ended with him choosing you over that inferiority.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

5 posted 2008-02-03 11:05 AM

Wow this is super good. There's one line in it that i think you left out a word or something in it cuz it didnt sound right when i was reading it. "I don’t who you think you are" I think you ment to say "I don't know who you think you are" but otherwise ithis is a really good poem

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

6 posted 2008-02-03 12:57 PM

i always love your poems and this is a really good one. im srry that this is true. i went through this with my bro except it was me being the stupid one. i finally snapped out of it. have you ever tryed just seeing him on your own and talking about how she treates him? you have to remember that things always change when he comes back remind him that youll always love him more than anyone else. i hope this helps.

-jenna

I am the arch angel
Member

since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

7 posted 2008-02-03 01:19 PM

jess this is so deep i'm touched, im so sorry i am in this situation but its my older brother and he left me and my sister beuz he hates life here because my mom(his step mom) is
making it horrible and now were stuck here with life without

~-Keagan-~

I am the arch angel
Member

since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

8 posted 2008-02-03 02:42 PM

hey jess do you have myspace or msn? if you have either let me know!

keagan

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

9 posted 2008-02-03 06:44 PM

hey Jess. That was really good, I was alsomt crying. I hope for both u and ur brohter that everything will work out. Just give it sime time.. maybe everything will turn out okay.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

10 posted 2008-02-04 06:45 AM

talent never dies...

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

11 posted 2008-02-05 02:03 AM

Jess hunn, your talent surpises me everytime great poem!!! I am sorry that you have to go through this... I know it must be hard to see your brother mess up the rest of his life for some girl he loves atm
Love ya
Krysti

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

12 posted 2008-02-05 09:45 PM

Man...this is the worst.
Wait! That sounded bad...what I meant was great write! It must be hard seeing your Brother slip away like that. It's a gradual prossess both ways but you don't have time do you? Man that sucks. Show him your love.
Best of luck
Frank

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

LittleWillow
Member

since 2007-12-27

Posts 54

13 posted 2008-02-06 02:52 PM

Wow.
Blew me away. The flow of the poem is great and really stands out.

Well done there! =]

xxx

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