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Teen Poetry #8

My Last Dream

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

0 posted 2008-01-09 08:35 PM

Eyes seaking
And searching
Where there's nothing
But words
The harsh reality
The fantasy world
When and where
They mix
We all should live
No pain too great
No sorrow too hard
Peace with souls
Forgotten allies
Return to hold arms
Enemies deminished
These are my lands
It's where I live
Between fantasy and land

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

1 posted 2008-01-09 09:23 PM

it has a ver unusual flow. it was a bit hard for me to read but it was good all the same.

-jenna

stil_watrs_run_deep
Junior Member

since 2008-01-05

Posts 14
missouri

2 posted 2008-01-09 10:41 PM

i loved it!
i loved how you painted such a vivid picture in fewer words than most.
it is very unique and i think its absolutely brilliant!

smiles are universal :]

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