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hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2008-01-06 05:06 AM

Wow I am totally and completely having a writers block.... Everytime i feel like writing the only thing I can think of to write about is HIM... and when I get down to writing about him I don't know what to say...*sigh* Haha omg and guess whut? I ate a whole box of ice cream, nasty stuff too(strawberry and bananna ewww) well chocolate and ice cream.. a womans best friend haha. Well here goes n e waiz....

Nostalgia

You said it was cute when I bit my lip
shook my head with my hand on my hip
just the way you smiled back with your eyes
it always gave me butterflies

Or lying with you slowly falling asleep
the covers piled up in one great heap
you sat up yelled "Dodge" and were out like a light
it was so cute I stayed up to watch you all night

And that one time I met your whole family
I loved them all and I think they liked me
I wonder if they ask you why i'm gone
they probably know I still haven't moved on

So many times I reminisce about our past
I was so naïve thinking we would last
but you went to college into the big unknown
you never had time and I was left alone

like two different people we drifted apart
I know you know you still have my heart
I suck back a sob theres no time to cry
it's a little late but it's time for goodbye.....

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2008-01-06 10:16 AM

aww your own goodbye poem, you were right, and love you critique message, how true, bad is really good. (too bad we never learn that until we've been tried beyond normal human capacity) lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

2 posted 2008-01-07 07:42 AM

going through pretty much that now, still.

never regret anything that made you smile, because at one point it was all that you wanted.

really good write, got me all emotional.

Belinda*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

joe86s
Junior Member

since 2008-01-07

Posts 10

3 posted 2008-01-07 05:57 PM

i like it!

ever seen 'eternal sunshine of the spotless mind'?

memories always make me think of that movie

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

4 posted 2008-01-08 07:19 PM

Wow hunnie I got all teary eyed I can truly relate saying good-bye to someone you loved so much. loved it.

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

5 posted 2008-01-08 09:36 PM

this is really good. it takes the feelings and bundles them up. i love how you can catch the emotion and show it to us.

-jenna

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

6 posted 2008-01-09 07:59 AM

this was very powerful and rolled off the tongue very easily, I liked it alot

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2008-01-11 04:22 PM

thank you all...

Krysti

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