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Teen Poetry #8

Why can't a girl love me?

Sweetpoet16m4u04
Member

since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

0 posted 2007-12-26 10:24 PM

Tonight I lay looking for answers from above
Should I really give up on looking for love?
The tears begin to fall down my cheeks
There is a special girl out there that my heart seeks.

I don’t know what to do sometimes
As my heart pours out all these sad rhymes.
Is love really worth all this pain
There is no sun in my skies all I see is rain.

She was never able to give me a glimmer of hope
So my heart was hung out on a rope.
My love was for her and only her.
And for once in my life I felt like a complete failure

I have always been able to move on in my life
But what makes it difficult is it her I want for a wife.
Should I just give up now knowing she will never feel the same
Or let my heart continue to feel like its burning in hells flame

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

1 posted 2007-12-26 10:29 PM

this is so beautiful. i hope things work out. :] just keep trying

-jenna

LittleWillow
Member

since 2007-12-27

Posts 54

2 posted 2007-12-27 11:30 AM

Amazing. Its really good. & totally flows =] Well done.

xxx

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

3 posted 2007-12-27 02:06 PM

wow this is really good. most of the time when ppl write about stuff like this (including me) is comes out kinda depressing and sad but u made it seem sweet and i had compassion on u when "the tears ran down your cheeks." i loved the vibe it was great

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"

Derek
Junior Member

since 2007-10-20

Posts 38
New Hampshire, USA

4 posted 2007-12-27 02:29 PM

I liked this one alot. good job

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2007-12-27 10:56 PM

I know how you feel hunn... don't give upp that seems like the right thing to sai right??? sometimes it works sometimes it doesn't but if life hands you lemons...
MAKE LEMONADE

guud luck with everything and very well written poem

Krysti

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

6 posted 2007-12-28 02:10 PM

I loved it.

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