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Teen Poetry #8

a miracle called you

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

0 posted 2006-10-01 01:02 AM

A miracle called you

Gem,
Diamond,
Thorn less stem,
What is this that I love?

Smiles,
Sunshine,
Million miles,
What is this great thing I have?

Laugh,
Merry,
Other half,
What is this miracle called?

Sweet,
Caring,
Special treat,
What is this I recall?

Smart,
Handsome,
So courageous,
I have a miracle, guess who…

Love,
Always,
My sweet dove,
It is my miracle called you.

~me
--ok, not so great, but i seriously just wrote this, so its ok if u say it sucks...lol

william foos
Member

since 2006-09-13

Posts 77
schenectady,new york,usa

1 posted 2006-10-01 02:29 PM

great write love is a miricle
love the papa

i see what i write and write what i see

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-10-01 10:05 PM

Well, I admit it's not my favorite by you. The comparisons are nice but for me it was a little confusing to read. It makes sense in the end though

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-10-01 10:24 PM

Love,
Always,
My sweet dove,
It is my miracle called you.

this, i think, was the strongest part of the poem it had the nicest flow and was the easiest to uderstand...
good write.
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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