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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-11-24 03:42 AM

Warming Up My Gravestone

Stop jacking me off
I hate everything you do
It’s like you never loved me
And I’m better off without you

Your ruining my life
So I’m better off dead
Here take the gun
Point it too my head

First it was a punch
Now it’s a slap
You say you want the best for me
But we all know that utter crap

You won’t let me decide
Because your scared I might fail
Faliures never been an option for you
Neither is a rejection letter in the mail

So I’m giving up
All hope is lost
Because if I don’t succed
I’ll pay at all costs

So now I’m finally walking
Found the courage in my heart
To pack up my things,
Make a new start

So burn the scars a little deeper
Maybe I’ll start crying
I’m so sick of your ultimatums
That I’m no longer afraid of dying

So now I’ll hold this ice
To the searing mark
Praying that the pain will go away
Before it gets dark

This is just another situation
That I know all too well
I’m simply just stuck
Between heaven and hell

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2007-11-24 05:46 PM

So burn the scars a little deeper
Maybe I’ll start crying
I’m so sick of your ultimatums
That I’m no longer afraid of dying

This is just another situation
That I know all too well
I’m simply just stuck
Between heaven and hell

danggggg this is great...i just osted one up last night that kinda feels the same wya but i like urs better

its really good. those two stanzas up there are my favorites!

great job keep writing

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2007-11-25 02:51 AM

o hunn, wow this was good I hope you are ok, if you ever need to talk i am always here

Krysti

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

3 posted 2007-11-25 01:22 PM

"So burn the scars a little deeper
Maybe I’ll start crying
I’m so sick of your ultimatums
That I’m no longer afraid of dying"

Ah, wow. I really liked this. The best poems seem to come from anger and hatred. Anyways, i wish you the best

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

4 posted 2007-11-27 07:30 PM

Oh wow it was such a strong and powerful poem

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-12-10 08:18 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

rebel~angel
Member

since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

6 posted 2007-12-11 08:35 PM

"Your ruining my life
So I’m better off dead
Here take the gun
Point it too my head"

I really liked it, but i'm one of those people who can't stand it when the wrong form of a word is stuck in the middle of an amazing poem..."too" has an extra "o". Understand, I'm not saying I don't like it, I think it is amazing...

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

7 posted 2007-12-12 08:19 PM

your the most amazing poet ever. i mean it. this was amazing

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

8 posted 2007-12-16 06:50 AM

Thanks CO...

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