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stop n breathe
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stop n breathe |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
iono this seems stupid i think it sux but w/e lemme know what u think kk Stop Breathe for a moment Stop See for a moment Look around you What do you see? Look at who surrounds you Are you happy? Or are you sad Don’t live your life All mad and watching your life past by Stop Meet new people Become their friend Greet new people See how it ends Love Is that what we need Signs Which do we need to heed Just stop And breathe [This message has been edited by justanotherstorm (11-23-2007 12:04 AM).] |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
it was tite stormy. but im not sure otha ppl will b able to appreciate it as much cuz they don't know how this came about. but still its good.  i like how i can c how ur feelings by ur writing and wut u tell me n make the connection. good job If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you" |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
thnx i dont think theyll know what im talkin bouts but w/e its what i feel so yeah thnx again |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
well thats the point...to write wut u feel or see.. or wut u think other ppl feel,,,, so yea If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you" |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow I liked this, great job  Krysti |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
thnx Krysti |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
It was good but this part below i think could be changed so that it only said stop at the beginning and you took out the other two stops Stop Breathe for a moment Stop See for a moment Stop Look around you |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
wow i like hwo u rite its pretty cool |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
thanx for the comment and idea ill see what i can do |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
u should keep on riting and never give up atleast thats how u support urslef if ur lonely and the way hwo u feel |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Haha, i really liked this. And it's amazing how well that fits into my life right now. Thank you So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
thnx n umm your welcome brittany |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed  ARCTIC WIND |
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