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Budding Taboo
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Budding Taboo |
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T.Cooper Junior Member
since 2007-11-11
Posts 16Indiana, US |
Budding Taboo The spasmodic fireplace, spews it's blackened, tiresome embers.. swimming so eloquently through the dark corridor towards the bruised abyss... and I sit, deep, trembling in my chair... The parlor light radiates... diffusing the entrails of a pale, cold night... devouring, and lingering over the daunting shadows... edging towards the breach... as I sit... trembling, anxiously in my chair... The threads of life's own shawl, digested and engulfed into the beckoning depth... Long worn hands have nothing more to grasp than mere silk of hair in this world! Delving through the years of an unfailing mind... fading into memories, leaving a black hearted shell, to dwell in his own void... in this... I sit! anxious, waiting in my chair... Death assumes eternity against the youthful spirit, as he will never cease to unveil his cryptic complexion... detaching us, from any sense of complacency, drowning us in his own wicked, vile allusions! Escaping this hell, I'll bury in a book... but tomorrow... I'll sit, deep, trembling in my chair! |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
wow..very impressive...I'd like to see this also posted in the Dark Poetry area...where it could be enjoyed by more folks. Thanks for the excellent read and welcome to this forum...I think you'll have yourself a time. |
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T.Cooper Junior Member
since 2007-11-11
Posts 16Indiana, US |
thanks for the welcome  i've been looking around for something like this to share my work and get get the much needed criticism to sharpen my writing, and also I posted it in the dark poetry like you said.. that should have been my first choice. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
If you really want to be critiqued try Critical Analysis #2. Personally I don't care much for critiquing, I'm more interested in receiving praise...ha, ha. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
welcome to pip, this was very good, but you can't post it in two open forums at the same time except if you put it in Critical Analysis #2. Or if you "repost" something from an archived forum. Please check your email for a special greeting! |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
oops, sorry for leading you astray T.Cooper. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Bad dogz. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Make my day..two legged!!!!! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LOL it's understandable, having it posted in Dark does make sense. But? This was the first post and had more replies, so the one in Dark was removed. There is always the next one.... |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
um lets see i got the impression that the first 2 stanzas were not a poem but after that it started to work a little better good job |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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T.Cooper Junior Member
since 2007-11-11
Posts 16Indiana, US |
glad you enjoyed it Arctic,and thanks for the welcome Sea! btw, what makes it not sound like a poem in the first two stanzas? |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Welcome to Passions I hope you enjoy it here. I liked this great first post  Krysti |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
woah, impressive first poem. I liked it, i'm glad i scrolled down to dig up some stuff i hadn't seen. (i read all the poems that get posted, i just don't always respond) this was great! liked it, and it was so unique and original. great job T. Cooper -Kate
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