Teen Poetry #8 |
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Shhh! I Love You! |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
When you told me it was over I believed you from the start I was constantly crying a river Because it broke my heart I didn’t know that it Broke yours too Now I know you would never do that And that you were just hiding the truth But you didn’t have to hide it I had forgiven you a long time ago I was in your arms in a second I would never have said no I love you way you treat me So gentle and kind How in the world did I find a love like this; a love like mine? We may not be the perfect couple A match made form above But were so perfect for each other And so happily in love A day in july Our first kiss was shared It was all so magical There was so much love in the air You actually said you loved me! It's more than just a crush I better be careful Cause I'm falling for you so much! My long awaited fairytale The thing 've dreamt of for years You have just given to me I can't believe it's finally here! Oh how good it feels To get away from the hell at home To have a love like this And know I'll never be alone There's no need to be sad With you by my side The thought of you make me happy And i think about you day and night How lucky I feel To have someone like you I'm feeling love for the first time And I don't know what to do! I know you won't breka my heart Like all the ones before You'll be there for me always Cause that's what friends are for I finally found someone Who feels the same as I do. And heres's a little secret: Shhhhh! I love you!!! <3 [This message has been edited by rebelangelv (10-27-2007 02:48 PM).] |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow Leah this was definately my favorite from you, It was so sweet and my favorite part the end shhh... I love you. The best part it was so cute. Well great write again ![]() Krysti |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
thanx!!! yah this is really old. but yea. i just realized how horrible the set up and spelling is so sry everyone!!!! btw does n e one know how to edit things after they r posted? |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
yes i do, one of the icons on the top of the poem will say "edit" and you click that and edit, though sometimes it says you can't do that after 24 hours or something like that, and then talk to someone in charge or something like that. but i loved this- it was way cute -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
thanx so much it helped a lot! o and thank u! |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
welcome welcome, hey i think that you should check out my outragouesly new dark ish type poem here's the whaterev these things are call . . . oh links . . . /pip/Forum84/HTML/003532.html -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
this was great kinda too sweet for me but its good |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
hmmm thanx. i was really like overly happy when i wrote this so i suppose it did come out kinda sweet. |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
thats cool i like darker things tho but this was good |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
thanx eh im just w/e w/ dark and sweet. i like em both. idk which one i prefer more. i think i wrote more depressing stuff than happy tho |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
hmm well i write depressing things and a few happy things i guess |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
u should start posting more things on here so ppl can get more of a feel for your writing. |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
yeah sure i guess i aint that good though |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
well thats wut pip talk is for: so that other people could tell u how good u really are and so that ppl can help u get better. |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
i dont want to get better i think im good right now but ill post more up later |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
u dont want to get better? thats kinda weird but ok. ill be looking foward to reading more of ur stuff |
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dah1namedj0na Junior Member
since 2007-08-19
Posts 19 |
i really loved this poem!! to me it shows the bond a true relationship can bring, even when at times there have been doubts. Although there are minor grammatical errors, it's still great nonetheless. |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
dah1namedj0na: thanx again! yea i knwo i really need to start checking my work b4 i post something cuz i always make a lot of mistakes... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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