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forever*wishing Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 178where my heart is 
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Picture this: You’re on a highway Stretching as far as the eye can see The cars are speeding by you so fast; it’s almost too hard to believe Your foot is on the gas pedal as far as it goes down You’re screaming for help, they don’t hear a sound Slower and slower you fall behind the others that move farther ahead Until finally you stop; all you can do is wait for what’s next Suddenly you’re turned around by some one who you once knew You see the bright path is really where no one here has moved Slowly you build up motion toward the new shining scene Light after light; you’re almost to the dream Others knock you down but you get back up to finally see Strong arms stretching out to hold your fragile body His mighty, gentle touch brings you to tears and to your knees Back on the highway he sets you to bring as many as you can Back to his loving grace that fills his beautiful land In your hearts he’s given a key to open up the unsaved souls To bring them to his feet, he’ll pull them from the cold Are we spreading his love to the nations? How can we sit here letting them die each second? Run, you precious child of God Go, and spread his saving word -Becca-  -i really need to work on this, but i figured i go ahead and post it anyway- there's more to living than being alive |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
well it's a really really good start such imagery too keep working on it this is definately a winner Krysti |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i liked it just the way it is it has a message and its stong in its own way i think you should keep it as it is but thats just my idea very well done |
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