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Teen Poetry #8

If it don't kill me

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

0 posted 2007-09-09 01:10 AM

If it don't kill me it will make me stronger,
why aren't I hella strong?
Its a saying and a song.
But its taken too long.
I'm still waiting to not hurt,how much longer?

Because I sure aren't dead
but
I'm not strong enough to not feel pain.
I still get cut and see red,
I still cry and lose myself going insane.

If it don't kill me it will make me stronger,
when do I get to be strong?

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

1 posted 2007-09-10 10:08 PM

"If it don't kill me it will make me stronger,
when do I get to be strong? "

Perfect ending. Loved it!

Pen.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2007-09-25 01:39 AM

Hi Rhia,

Wow! This does not sound like the rhia I remember reading. You've cut back on the wording in this one, which is great in some ways, except I also liked all of your descriptions, but the grammar is all over the place. Very different sort of writing from you, I'm sorry that I've missed out on reading your posts but I'm back to stay, I hope, and I'll look forward to seeing what else you've come up with

Stargal

"The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away"
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