Teen Poetry #8 |
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nararative poem |
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Yogurt Junior Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 18Canada |
Feeling alone, no one to take her hand She falls into a trance and never wants to wake up For fear she will fade away if she walks into the day Behind this broken heart is the one she loved But he, he dos not no how this young girl feels He faked his love She faked the hate Her best friend fell in love Tears burning in her eyes As she see’s her two of a kind Runs for the door He calls out to her She stops And he says I love you Now full of dread and confused She says how can you love me when your loving her Some times I regret running |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
awe this was really good I liked it.. the content was amazing ![]() hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Aww...it was kinda sad, but very nicely written ![]() So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
let me say, this was one of my favorites from you. |
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Yogurt Junior Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 18Canada |
thx guys |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
"He faked his love She faked the hate" your lines here remind me of lines i'm working on in my newest that isn't finished. "with eyes like shadows watches she with pride to swallow he lets her be" it was beautiful and i felt as if you were wrtting a bit of my story. -Red "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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