Open Poetry #44 |
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I Felt a Heartbeat |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania ![]() |
I felt a heart beat in my womb That marked the pulse of time The rhythm of this sacred room Defined a child of mine It was a mirror to the past A sound pure and divine The blood that filled a little heat Passed through this heart of mine The lifeline of my ancestry To which I have been heir Will weave the sinews of her heart And ribbons in her hair Beat, little heart, your thumping sound Through head and hand and limb An infant’s breath is soon to silence Every angel hymn Elizabeth Santos |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
HUGE SMILES! ![]() |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Hello there stranger. This is nice, makes me wonder what it would be like. Nice write The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Awesome, dear Elizabeth! Love, Margherita ![]() |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Such natural beauty in your words and you bring the emotions to the forefront to carry your reader through with inspire. Wonderful. |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
![]() Carpe' Diem, |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A "mother's poem" appreciated by a mother. Ida |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a beautiful write! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Liz, I adored the first 4 lines ~ "I felt a heart beat in my womb That marked the pulse of time The rhythm of this sacred room Defined a child of mine" ~ and every line that followed thereafter. Yours is a very loving mother's heart. ![]() ~ and your pen expresses it so beautifully. ![]() Love & Mother/Baby Light, Linda ![]() |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
I have no heartbeat in my womb It's been replaced with the cacophony of all the beating of the world But I remember that first beat still. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
HelmutB what a beautiful thing to say |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Elizabeth, I love this. I used to listen through my wife stomach for all my kids' heartbeats. This is a lovely poem. Love Bobby |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent expression Elizabeth.....You're still on top of the poetic emotional picture writing. Eric |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A heart touching poem dear Elizabeth, a delight to read, thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. Love to you. Lindsay |
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