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Sunday stones |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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Croissants and french roast alongside the tricolored cobblestones, the daydreams thick,in baywindows and brie in tropical locales in ports with trendy tables and windowpane eyes behind the alluring shades anywhere but here the morning is flat grimfaced and stoned stamped in hungover moons and hearts interrupted drowning in vodka, straight up and the redundancy of carbon copy sonnets run with the wind anywhere but here the sobriety of Sunday and the preaching of sparrows, on iced over sycamores the leaves in remiss while the many cold moons continue to tally. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Michele - ah sweet words you write, I do enjoy them... BC |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I find when I read your work it creates the most vivid paintings in my mind. This was the most beautiful artistic piece thus far  and the preaching of sparrows, on iced over sycamores |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Ahaaa......I can smell the air, I can see the stones. How well your words allow my mind to see. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"the morning is flat grimfaced and stoned stamped in hungover moons and hearts interrupted" Only you could gift us this imagery. Enjoyed, Mish. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dear Goddess, Wishing you soon, balmy nights beneath vibrant leaves anew. “windowpane eyes behind the alluring shades” Gorgeous Michelle. Have you any croissants left?  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I read this in a melancholic moment and that's how I interpreted and FELT it. This is an exceptional write. the preaching of sparrows ... now this, oh this!! Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ink'd, the morning may be flat, but your poem most certainly isn't! Owl |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautifully worded and imagery supreme. ---------------------------------------------- the morning is flat grimfaced and stoned stamped in hungover moons and hearts interrupted --------------------------------------------- and the preaching of sparrows, on iced over sycamores ---------------------------------------------- The above illustrate exactly what I am talking about and I do love when a poem creates visuals to indulge in. Well done |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for reading and for the feedback, always appreciated |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"the redundancy of carbon copy sonnets" ...clever line...a very good write...thoroughly enjoyed...thank you very much for making it so... |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Felt the mood here, as if it were my own. Ida |
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