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A Gift Left Behind
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A Gift Left Behind |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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A Gift Left Behind The breath of spring was wild and free just after a winter's freeze and the colorful birds of the eastern region were singing with gracious ease. The river was blue like the clearing sky the waves in the breezes played. The soil of the land was moist and prime for seed in the month of May High on a hill a man stared from a field his drawn face character lined, he watched the Terns as they rolled and reeled on winds of familiar time. He drew waves of thought from the past into memories of a young man, whose true love had come to him so fast like a child he'd asked for her hand. Beneath the starlit skies at night his arms held her beauty so fair Her golden hair in the soft moonlight left a vision beyond compare. But now her pleading voice filled his ears "move on," she cried, "move on." Her final calling had come that year and then she was ghastly gone. He recalled.... When the wagons creaked and the wheels squeaked and cedar rails marked the time when family dreams were everything and together was a frame of mind. Now a Cadillac rests by the old woodshed and the wagon rots in the barn and the old homestead where the children lived plays host to an old man's charms. Then into his thoughts broke a sweet sound to bring back the dead from the past across the field there came running abound a small curly haired lass. "Grandpa, Grandpa," was her jubuilant shout, "I've come to stay over the night!" and into his arms she jumped just about knocking him down with delight. Her small face cradled next to his neck he fought back the tears in his eyes. Out of his vision came life out of death in a gift that his love left behind. Celtrue2000@E3B1G9 |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
This is a beautiful story, Had me griped from beginning to end, A mixture of happy, and sad, but always hope, Marvelous poem, very well penned.. Thank you for sharing Annie |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you, Eric~~ Your words touched me this morning.  M |
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mandamaywhoviay Junior Member
since 2009-01-02
Posts 12 |
This really was beautiful.. I haven't seen much like this, your way with words is quite amazing. I love how the story progressed |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Annie I appreciate the visit and the kind comments....Have a nice day over there in jolly ol England! Eric |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Sir Poet, what a lovely story you've penned this morning. And what a handsome picture of you as well. It's nice to have a face to go with the words.  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
WOW! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
beautiful, beautiful, beautiful...read it aloud and almost choked up...then I got to the end: "Out of his vision came life out of death in a gift that his love left behind" ...and a slow, broad smile came across my face as you tied it all together so well...exquisite |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Maureen & mandamaywhoviay I appreciate the visit and the kind words. Glad you could stop by and take the trip. Take care Eric |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - didn't know what to expect when I first started to read this. In my opinion this writing needs to be framed and hung on a wall. Great writing... BC |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Richy & Mysteria thanks for the well penned and the wow....I appreciate the visit and the comments Take care Eric |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bill & Steaven I thank you so much for taking the time to read this and comment so favorbly I truly appreciate it so much! AND nourzihane That's so sweet of you the way you replied. I do appreciate the thought so very much... Take care all Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, Eric, what a gifted story-teller/poet/song-writer, ye be! A riveting and highly visual~ as well as emotional ~ read. Very well done, my fellow Canadian!  Linda |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
I know of this gift also...wonderful write. |
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Burk28 Member
since 2009-01-08
Posts 80Michigan USA |
such a beautiful and sad piece, well captured here, bravo Peace of mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Tina & Burk I surely do appreciate the read and the comments. Eric |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, Yes, that's the way it is, and that's the way it should be. Bobby |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Bobby Thanks for droppin in and commenting. Much appreciated Yes, that's the way it should be. Eric |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A very beautiful and poignant write, dear Eric! Something to ponder! Love, Margherita |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Eric...Great story poem, my favorite kind. Thanks so much for sharing...paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is so beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes and reminded me of my daughter who left me a beautiful little grandaughter. Ida |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Margherita, Paul & Ida Those are very kind and encouraging comments. I'm glad you dropped in to read and comment. Eric |
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ShortBanshee New Member
since 2009-01-11
Posts 2UK |
I loved this poem, it's a moving piece Thankyou |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank You Short So glad you could find the time to drop in. Eric |
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