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Open Poetry #44

Le Morte De Deus

drdyllyo
New Member

since 2009-02-12

Posts 3
WI, USA

0 posted 2009-02-12 04:46 PM

God stands in a farmer's field,
the crops are ready to surrender their yield,
a lone crow eats a kernel felled,
and God in a thunderous voice did yell.

"Please stop killing each other you stupid blokes,
you tote your guns and inhale your smokes,
you rape young women you perverted young men,
divorce is prevelent, as are kiddy porn dens!"

"You hate your neighbors and love yourselves,
you cut your wrists and hang yourselves,
I have given you everything you should need,
love, laughter, life, shelter, and seed."

"Yet ye' persist to disobey me,
are ye' that ignorant, so unable to see?"
God bends over, cries in his hands,
burdened by our selfish demands.

Five minutes later, God has died,
with a crow and the corn, does he lie.

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

1 posted 2009-02-12 06:45 PM

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God’s Sadness

Jules Supervielle

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Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2009-02-15 09:44 PM

I like the idea of this one. It's a bit rough in places, with too much inversion to make a natural rhythm. But it's ambitious and different. I like it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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