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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Like a devoted singer clings to rhyme, with words as precious as the spice of youth, my love, made sure by feelings divine, lives within the mercy of the warmth of you whether I'm thoughtless, loving, or stained, or clean, or searching my own faults, or none, or more, regardless of the flight of past scenes I give my heart invested in your worth. So since I am not dead, sick, nor denied such is this virtue where my substance is. Might I then cry indebted while alive to be a part of your uncommon gift. So what is left, is left for you to see This love I live, much more for you than me. . . . . . |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, This is a lovely write. You might think to throw in a few strophe breaks. But then it might make a very good song all in one piece. Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very cute, dear Eric, it seems to me that you have invested your love well. Love, Margherita  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - I sense deep caring in this write. Well done... BC |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
A lovely write Ethome. Love is about the one we love, not ourselves. You captured that perfectly. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Eric, this is a beautiful piece spiced with some interesting lists. Mark |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What's left...is a lovely expression of real love. An enjoyable read, Eric. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Bobby Thanks for dropping by. This is simply a sonnet not a song in this case and there is some punctuation there it's just hard to see in this format. I appreciate the read and the response. Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful work! *S* I especially like the closing couplet! *S* |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautiful and sincere homage, a poignant poem. yann |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Eric, you True-ly summed up self-less love perfectly with your closing line ~ "This love I live, much more for you than me."  May your Valentine's Day be a joyful one!  Linda |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Margherita I thank you for the read and the feelings expressed. Peace to you and yours Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bill Thanks for the deep caring expression and for the visit. Take care Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Suncleaver. Yes, you're right, Love is about the one we love, not ourselves I appreciate that comment. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Marc Thanks for the beautiful piece words I surely do appreciate it. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Midnite for the kind words and the visit. Eric |
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