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Beautifully Mine
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Beautifully Mine I tried to write you a love poem words just spin around the page I follow your lips with mine when you speak in whispers that chase your breath standing on a shadows lace I know where my heart is flying with black birds across a sunset I looked up and it looked like sky poetry saying things I never could of how my heart feels beautifully mine "I'm so hard to handle |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
Well, it was a little strange because of lack of punctuation. Other than that, it was well written, and I probably would have enjoyed it much more. Sorry, I'm one of those people who just hate little or no punctuation. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sky poetry.... pretty cool |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Helen, I have enjoyed a lot of your poetry in my time here at PiP - but this one is my favorite. It's perfect. Alison |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
"saying things I never could" Well I can very well done How is that for words. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...so many good parts, but I think these words caught my attention most: "in whispers that chase your breath" |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Helen, this is so beautiful. I love reading your poetry. Even though I don't always reply. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i love how you had the birds speak for you here |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I tried to pick favorite lines and couldn't... I love every perfect word! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dear Helen, your words are like billowy pillows of down and cumulus, lips in the wind, mouthing whether and reign. Blowing whoosh and breath, of softness, and whisper. Loving this.  |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
"Beautifully Mine" A nice thought... |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Smiles. Not to change the mood or subject or anything here, but, ummmmmmmmm, like Charlie Brown with the Red Head Girl, sometimes, Valentines are so, so very, very difficult to give away. Aren’t they? Loved your poem. -Bob |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I looked up and it looked like sky poetry saying things I never could of how my heart feels I have actually read the sky that way myself. Beautifully done Helen. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Helen - another magical work, you have much romance in your heart... BC |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
No, those weren't blackbirds accompanying your heart but the silhouettes of doves. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wonderful!!!!! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick..makes me look at the sky and want to see it |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a wonderful image....'sky poetry' |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a beautiful moment of awareness. Enjoying the beauty within yourself is important for your perception of all the gifts you have to give. Eric |
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