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Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2009-01-29 01:06 AM

Make Believe

I still love the way
Snow melts on my face
These long walks

I wonder if this
Will be the last snow
Before I leave here

Tears freeze on my cheek
Painful, itchy tears
which make eyes redden

I want to scratch them
Make them disappear

And mostly forget
That I still love you
After all these years...

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Juju (01-29-2009 08:56 AM).]

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

1 posted 2009-01-29 01:15 AM

Beautifully done.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2009-01-29 01:19 AM

such an aching longing to such a lovely write...still, I find myself sighing a very heavy sigh...

...very nicely done

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-01-29 08:27 AM

Yo dear Juju,

It's nice to see something posted that not entirely about death and dying.

Don't worry, you'll be around for awhile.

Bobby

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

4 posted 2009-01-29 08:51 AM

,

Very good Juju

John

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DharkOne
Junior Member

since 2009-01-28

Posts 31

5 posted 2009-01-29 11:30 AM

I bow.
Silent in a moment of deja-vu.
Have not we all lived such a moment,
So finely given form in you ?

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

6 posted 2009-01-29 01:28 PM

Great.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Lisa Teller
Junior Member

since 2009-01-27

Posts 11
usa

7 posted 2009-01-29 04:34 PM

enjoyed this very much

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2009-01-29 04:50 PM

Felt this through every line... great work!

j Tomorrow
Junior Member

since 2008-08-31

Posts 14
Boston

9 posted 2009-01-29 05:29 PM

Wonderful!

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

10 posted 2009-01-29 05:45 PM

I enjoyed this very much. There's a personal story I can definitely relate to this.

Though the pain of the heart brings many tears
They shall be cleansed in time
This pain that has endured for years
Shall be excised in rhyme

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

shelerella75
Member

since 2009-01-30

Posts 58

11 posted 2009-01-31 03:18 PM

made me reminiscent of a long-ago experience... well-written!

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

12 posted 2009-01-31 03:47 PM

Juju - this is so touching my heart skipped a beat when I was reading it. Very nice...

BC

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