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Open Poetry #44
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ken206573
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since 2008-10-14
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0 posted 2009-01-27 05:01 PM

raining in winter
clashing of thunder, lightning
wind howls until dawn
my heart beats in silences
waiting for you to come home
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Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 posted 2009-01-27 06:49 PM

Yo Ken206573,

This is nice enough.  You got the form right.

Bobby
Marc-Andre
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since 2008-12-07
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2 posted 2009-01-27 10:35 PM

Ken, I can picture this clearly in my mind. The form is right indeed, and the imagery isn't bad either. Mark
ken206573
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since 2008-10-14
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3 posted 2009-01-28 05:02 PM

thank you Bobby for your comment. I'm glad you liked it
ken206573
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since 2008-10-14
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4 posted 2009-01-28 05:05 PM

I can't forget Mark here. Thank you as well for reading my poem


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