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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2009-01-24 10:23 PM


twitch

I do not fit in these
clothes
that once belonged to me

*twitch*

I'm thinking different thoughts
stuff
they told me I should not

twitch

a g'damnned reckoning
rough
I hit the ground and throb

zzzzzzzztwitch!

I am the second string
quarterback
who once was robbed...

Last and fair
the last despair
spirals that pass Hail M'ray

twitch

I am alone at last
with zilch
and nothing left to say

but monotones and droolings
and stories told with some coke-zing;

I am the fool that I laughed at
with great hair and the queendom that
I swallowed with an olive, speared

watching me alone.

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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace
1 posted 2009-01-24 11:27 PM


you are true
beauty within
the path going
and has been
felt the words
sting of fault
cried tears
to pillar salt
turned to see
path taken
a promise made
not forsaken
yet, there lies
dreams unspoken
you now bend
remain unbroken
and soon comes
when you will soar
NO ONE takes that
you are
so
much
more

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2009-01-25 01:48 AM


Karen, your poem (as always) is so rich with meaning, art, sensitivity, innuendos and intellect, and Helen, what an outstanding, understanding (in both senses of the word), beautiful, appreciative, (and in my humble opinion, accurate) interpretation/tribute of/to both Karen's poem and Karen!

And Karen, you are NEVER alone.  For a start, you have a great following and huge bunch of friends here in Pip!

Wowweee!

Owl

woodtic
Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 87

3 posted 2009-01-25 03:08 AM


Hey!

Pull back from lies
we tell ourselves
when we despise the mirror.

Reflections'
tricky light

we see more clearly
with our eyes
shut tight.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2009-01-25 03:23 AM


*grins*


Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2009-01-25 09:26 AM


Sometimes we just need to buy new clothes.  I prefer retro, slightly loved clothes.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2009-01-25 10:49 AM


Ouuu I love a good read, now this Charmed One brings you to the table! It's full of meaning indeed! I can totally understand the feeling you have written between the lines, or shall I say, in the lines pretty much You described it puurfectly

to you Charmed one
ARCTIC WIND

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
7 posted 2009-01-25 01:47 PM


Great write, Karen, and, if the truth be know, we all know about the "twitch"... and just when we think we've got rid of it, back it comes.  What a life!  

Helen

turtle
Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548
Harbor
8 posted 2009-01-25 02:59 PM


Hi Serenity,

A twitch, an itch, a paradigm of  platitude....

I can relate.

Turtle

suthern
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
9 posted 2009-01-29 03:34 PM


A double treat! *S* Two dynamite writes!

There's no way I can come close to Helen's eloquence... but K, dear one... I think that mirror needs a permanent dip in the mighty Mississipp' if'n it can't show you your beauty... or the cadre' of friends standing by.

Alison
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Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
10 posted 2009-05-18 12:04 PM


Well, twitch your way back to the top, baby.  This is some writing!

A

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